I don't mind the concrit, though I'm not sure if I'll ever be motivated to fix it all. xD I mean, not that I want to be lazy and not do anything but I did it during NaNoWriMo and now I look at it and think and what exactly did I think I was doing? in places. xD
The rephrasing, I can do (whenI'mnotsupposedtobeleavingtogotoschool), at least. xD Thanks for pointing it out. I mean, I'm sure there're some wonderful run on sentences that make nooo sense in there.
The nickname thing, I'm not sure, I've seen it as both and it's been a while since I've played the game. I shall attempt looking it up or something.
The getting drunk thing is sort of referring to trouble Irvine and Zell tend to get up to when drunk that I think I intended to mention again later and didn't because Zell was a sodden heap of woe. I shall try and slip in some clarification for that.
And Rinoa, well. She's grown up and stopped trying to make things with her and Squall work, but she still wants to get Squall out of his shell/make him find some happiness. She knows he likes Seifer, and that Seifer isn't exactly averse to a relationship, and thus is trying to get him to stop moping. xD
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The rephrasing, I can do (whenI'mnotsupposedtobeleavingtogotoschool), at least. xD Thanks for pointing it out. I mean, I'm sure there're some wonderful run on sentences that make nooo sense in there.
The nickname thing, I'm not sure, I've seen it as both and it's been a while since I've played the game. I shall attempt looking it up or something.
The getting drunk thing is sort of referring to trouble Irvine and Zell tend to get up to when drunk that I think I intended to mention again later and didn't because Zell was a sodden heap of woe. I shall try and slip in some clarification for that.
And Rinoa, well. She's grown up and stopped trying to make things with her and Squall work, but she still wants to get Squall out of his shell/make him find some happiness. She knows he likes Seifer, and that Seifer isn't exactly averse to a relationship, and thus is trying to get him to stop moping. xD
Yay. :D