lassarina: (Seifer: Killin Ur Squallz)
Lassarina ([personal profile] lassarina) wrote in [personal profile] edenbound 2006-11-13 02:41 am (UTC)

I like the father's discomfort and awkwardness, his lack of understanding of the nurse's actions.

"but focuses on the features of the kid in her arms" - I'm being nitpicky here, but the word "kid" seems kind of jarring in this sentence. I think it would work better as "baby" or "child."

I do wonder why they haven't married.

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